Okay I'll try my best to explain what the teacher meant by his evauation and comments. It appears that he has
underlined the words he wants defined and
circled ideas he would like to see supported with facts from the lesson.
The objective of any school assignmnet is to communicate back understanding of the content to the instructor. Opinion is for interest, but understanding and application is what determines the grade.
'Protectionism' ~ He wants your definition of what protectionism is.
'economy should be run' and 'have done things ' ~ Define economy. Stay away from should's, should have's, ought's and ought have's,
'thought America' and 'supposed to be an independent nation'(Such as?) ~ Make them declarative statements of opinion (see DMan Productions ™ nodes for excellent examples of declaratives)
'Revolution' (Ok -- good idea!)' ~ Positive reinforcement for what he wants in the paper. A use of his lesson content to support your statement "years ago just to come back and start becoming dependant..."
'the nations' and' sought refuge from?' ~ Name the nations and tell why Americans were seeking refuge.
'Americans, shouldn't,' ~ Tell which Americans and change to a declarative
' be buying and consuming,' 'produce,' ~ give examples of comsumerism, list some examples of the goods produced.
'George Washington' ~define who he is with an example of what he did in hisory,
ie: George Washington, leader of the American Army in one of the few revolutions that did not eventually turn on itself......
'can come from making allies',FreeTrade, and tradition.
(Wow?
~ Tell him who the allies were , define Free Trade and tradition, tell him what you learned in class.
A very patriotic argument!)' and 'Free Trade economists don't care about tradition. (good point)' ~ Positive feedback, emphasizing your points as good
examples.
'They are about Big Business. (your example is stretching it...)' ~ hard to tell, seems like yours and his ideas of Big Business are different, you may want to tell what how you define Big Business. Not all Big Businesses particpate in Free Trade might be what he's getting at.
(good point) ~ He liked the use of Lincoln's quote to support the content of the paper, shows understanding and application of the objective of the paper.
(A good start, Ryan, but there is so much more to say for your position. Use the material given!)
Grade == (28/40)
~ I think 'use the material given' is what he's wanting here and would like you to redo the assignment. I know it's regurgitating what you already know, but the teacher has to see evidence of what you know in order to evaluate (grade) your understandings on the content.
I hope you find this helpful and no charge for the professional tutelage;)
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